From fe3ab19f92837e2b623bf353be3dceab30282cdf Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Fri, 27 Nov 2015 17:10:28 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 1/6] translation fix I cringed --- Update/onik_009_02.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_009_02.txt b/Update/onik_009_02.txt index 5cd687b..363e7fc 100644 --- a/Update/onik_009_02.txt +++ b/Update/onik_009_02.txt @@ -1725,7 +1725,7 @@ void main() NULL, " Even if Oyashiro-sama's curse actually did exist,", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/08/120800096", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "そんな圭一くんに祟りがあるなんてとても思えないね。」", - NULL, " Keiichi-kun couldn't bring himself to believe that such a thing existed.\"", Line_Normal); + NULL, " I can't imagine that Keiichi-kun would become a target.\"", Line_Normal); ClearMessage(); From 881e53eaf072f05c9ca7e215fea604fd9de5bca9 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Fri, 27 Nov 2015 17:16:13 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 2/6] translation fix I can see why one might think it's intended to mean that the club can't lose, but I'm about 99% sure that isn't the meaning. --- Update/onik_009_02.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_009_02.txt b/Update/onik_009_02.txt index 363e7fc..5d5fa3d 100644 --- a/Update/onik_009_02.txt +++ b/Update/onik_009_02.txt @@ -2058,7 +2058,7 @@ void main() //　甘いぜ富竹さん。これがあるからうちの部は負けられないんだよ…￥ OutputLine(NULL, "　甘いぜ富竹さん。これがあるからうちの部は負けられないんだよ…。", - NULL, "You're too naive, Tomitake-san. This is why our club can never lose...", Line_Normal); + NULL, "You're too naive, Tomitake-san. This is why you've got to avoid losing in our club...", Line_Normal); ClearMessage(); From 1ca8dd798240280d970a7077326c70a19047c0f7 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Fri, 27 Nov 2015 17:18:52 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 3/6] translation fix yay for exact opposites ._. (keep in mind here that she both wants to sound menacing and in truth wants the signatures to remain on Tomitake's shirt as a memorial) --- Update/onik_009_02.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_009_02.txt b/Update/onik_009_02.txt index 5d5fa3d..0a635b5 100644 --- a/Update/onik_009_02.txt +++ b/Update/onik_009_02.txt @@ -2093,7 +2093,7 @@ void main() NULL, "\"Ahaha, it just has to be permanent.", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/03/120300006", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "お洗濯したら落ちちゃうじゃない。」", - NULL, " It comes off when you do the laundry, anyway.\"", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, " Water-based marker would come off in the laundry.\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From d4a54b71ca283a7023a84687bce751278d7b470e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Fri, 27 Nov 2015 17:22:58 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 4/6] small English fix --- Update/onik_009_02.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_009_02.txt b/Update/onik_009_02.txt index 0a635b5..c0c7658 100644 --- a/Update/onik_009_02.txt +++ b/Update/onik_009_02.txt @@ -2456,7 +2456,7 @@ void main() //「こんな時間だけど、…１人で大丈夫か？＠ PlaySE(3, "s01/01/120100042", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "「こんな時間だけど、…１人で大丈夫か？」", - NULL, "\"It's already pretty late. Are you all right by yourself?\"", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "\"It's already pretty late. Are you alright by yourself?\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From 039264d63335e7323c828f7c6850e28f87fb8b51 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Fri, 27 Nov 2015 17:31:32 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 5/6] translation and wording --- Update/onik_009_02.txt | 4 ++-- Update/onik_tips_09.txt | 2 +- 2 files changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_009_02.txt b/Update/onik_009_02.txt index c0c7658..178b62a 100644 --- a/Update/onik_009_02.txt +++ b/Update/onik_009_02.txt @@ -2489,7 +2489,7 @@ void main() //「出したら…助けに来てくれるのかな？……かな？＠ PlaySE(3, "s01/02/120200008", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "「出したら…助けに来てくれるのかな？……かな？」", - NULL, "\"If someone does come... will you come and save me, maybe? ...Maybe?\"", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "\"If I do shout... will you come and save me, maybe? ...Maybe?\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); @@ -2544,7 +2544,7 @@ void main() //　誰もが微塵ほども口にしない祟りの話＠……知れば知るほどに不安になる、今夜￥ OutputLine(NULL, "　誰もが微塵ほども口にしない祟りの話。", - NULL, "The curse that not a single person even whispered about.", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "The curse that not a soul mentioned, even under their breath.", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLine(NULL, "……知れば知るほどに不安になる、今夜。", NULL, " ...The more I learned about it tonight, the more unsettling it became.", Line_Normal); ClearMessage(); diff --git a/Update/onik_tips_09.txt b/Update/onik_tips_09.txt index 50b4548..7518a3c 100644 --- a/Update/onik_tips_09.txt +++ b/Update/onik_tips_09.txt @@ -52,7 +52,7 @@ //　ＸＸさん夫妻は展望台で柵にもたれかかっていた所、柵が壊れ転落した模様＠ OutputLine(NULL, "　ＸＸさん夫妻は展望台で柵にもたれかかっていた所、柵が壊れ転落した模様。", - NULL, "It appeared a railing at the observatory that the XXs leaned on had broken, causing him to fall.", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "It appeared a railing at the observatory that the XXs leaned on had broken, causing them to fall.", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From b9137ede32ae0135a74125a08b2903142b6955f6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Fri, 27 Nov 2015 17:35:56 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 6/6] flow and wording just made the two text lines flow better as a single unit. --- Update/onik_009_02.txt | 7 ++----- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_009_02.txt b/Update/onik_009_02.txt index 178b62a..8b61252 100644 --- a/Update/onik_009_02.txt +++ b/Update/onik_009_02.txt @@ -1548,17 +1548,14 @@ void main() NULL, " Or it may have been because of a pre-existing condition.\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); - - //「でも、奇病ですよ＠　この医学の進歩した時代に原因不明なんて…。￥ PlaySE(3, "s01/01/120100029", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "「でも、奇病ですよ？", - NULL, "\"But it was an unknown illness.", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "\"But it was an unknown illness.", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); OutputLine(NULL, "　この医学の進歩した時代に原因不明なんて…。」", - NULL, " It's hard to believe something with an unknown cause could exist with all our advances in medicine...\"", Line_Normal); + NULL, " It's hard to believe such a thing could exist with all our advances in medicine...\"", Line_Normal); ClearMessage(); - //「尾ひれだよ＠噂が噂を呼んだだけさ＠ PlaySE(3, "s01/08/120800076", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "「尾ひれだよ。",