From a6cd5145b51d9dec7cfd244c14fd1022686a828c Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 17:35:30 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 01/11] audio line change note this seems like a silly edit by the Sui team, unless they re-wrote the following line(s) --- Update/onik_011.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index aa79ab7..116f779 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -51,7 +51,7 @@ void main() DisableWindow(); DrawBustshotWithFiltering( 1, "me_se_wi_a1", "left", 1, -160, 0, FALSE, 0, 0, 0, 0, 0, 0, 1300, TRUE ); -//「圭ちゃんが喜びそうなＨ番組なんかやってたっけぇ？＠ +//「圭ちゃんが喜びそうなＨ番組なんかやってたっけぇ？＠ // Mion doesn't say the "H" part in the audio.. makes Satoko's line seem really weird so I'm leaving this unchanged (maybe Sui had a different follow-up line?) PlaySE(3, "s01/03/120300057", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "「圭ちゃんが喜びそうなＨ番組なんかやってたっけぇ？」", NULL, "\"Was one of those raunchy TV shows you love so much on last night?\"", Line_WaitForInput); From 4fd7150cc25c61646a35c2057d4935f4851f6dcb Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 17:47:07 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 02/11] phrasing removed weird duplication --- Update/onik_011.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index 116f779..e3bc0e5 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -839,7 +839,7 @@ void main() NULL, "\"N-Not bad, Satokoooo!!", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/01/120100166", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "　俺が寝ている間に…気配を消してこれだけの上等をやってくれるたぁよぅ…！！！」", - NULL, " While I was sleeping, you were able to conceal your presence and able to pull off this fine piece of work!\"", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, " While I was sleeping, you were able to conceal your presence to pull off this fine piece of work!\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From ef22b806a0b31b3814eb508f1aff39fbcad41e4b Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 17:52:13 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 03/11] small change in voiced line --- Update/onik_011.txt | 4 ++-- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index e3bc0e5..c28f125 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -1188,8 +1188,8 @@ void main() //「…家業手伝いは除くと書いてありますです。＠ PlaySE(3, "s01/05/120500020", 256, 64); - OutputLine(NULL, "「…家業手伝いは除くと書いてありますです。」", - NULL, "\"...There's a clause that states family businesses are excluded.\"", Line_WaitForInput); + OutputLine(NULL, "「…家事手伝いは除くと書いてありますです。」", + NULL, "\"...There's a clause that states household chores are excluded.\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From b38a76b40fe903cfdb6cf36a39b17154d6b51e26 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 18:02:36 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 04/11] censorship! sexual innuendo was removed from the audio! --- Update/onik_011.txt | 6 +++--- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index c28f125..5570895 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -1492,11 +1492,11 @@ void main() //「…いっぱいいっぱい慰みものにされましたですね＠かわいそかわいそです。＠ PlaySE(3, "s01/05/120500024", 256, 64); - OutputLine(NULL, "「…いっぱいいっぱい慰みものにされましたですね。", - NULL, "\"...She was used as a plaything for quite a while.", Line_WaitForInput); + OutputLine(NULL, "「…いっぱいいっぱい甚振られましたですね。", + NULL, "\"...Being picked on so much by Keiichi-kun.", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/05/120500025", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "かわいそかわいそです。」", - NULL, " How unfortunate.\"", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, " You poor thing.\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From 792aaa4b24fdac66915708fdcb1fd822587d4d71 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 18:24:12 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 05/11] wording I think "steps" is just incorrect for indoor stairs ("stairs" is also used correctly everywhere else in the scripts) --- Update/onik_011.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index 5570895..8cae472 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -3002,7 +3002,7 @@ void main() //　ふと意識が戻り、階下の母が呼んでいるのが聞こえた￥ OutputLine(NULL, "　ふと意識が戻り、階下の母が呼んでいるのが聞こえた。", - NULL, "Finally, I returned to my senses as I heard my mother calling out to me from the bottom of the steps.", Line_Normal); + NULL, "Finally, I returned to my senses as I heard my mother calling out to me from the bottom of the stairs.", Line_Normal); ClearMessage(); From 8017ec31ef7c4047a655c95a0ee6b4e2378738db Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 18:32:28 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 06/11] missing sound --- Update/onik_011.txt | 4 ++-- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index 8cae472..4edfdb7 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -3358,9 +3358,9 @@ void main() PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700145", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "最初の事件、ご存知ですよね？", NULL, " Do you know the first incident?", Line_WaitForInput); - PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700146", 256, 64); + PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700146", 256, 64); // missing line OutputLine(NULL, "　バラバラ殺人。」", - NULL, " The murder by dismemberment?\"", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, " The murder by dismemberment.\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From a9957fa5dc6f6d22d61a4767e64a7866afa037e7 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 18:36:15 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 07/11] phrasing "remnants" makes it sound like parts of her body, when this is not the case. --- Update/onik_011.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index 4edfdb7..c0f439b 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -3566,7 +3566,7 @@ void main() //　…ダイバーが沼に潜りいくつかの遺品を回収したが肝心の死体は発見できなかった＠ OutputLine(NULL, "　…ダイバーが沼に潜りいくつかの遺品を回収したが肝心の死体は発見できなかった。", - NULL, "...A diver was able to recover a few remnants, but they weren't able to find a body.", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "...A diver was able to recover a few of her articles, but they weren't able to find a body.", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From dfe4ef67e79ba397eeae5b02722cb4d31777a584 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 18:37:12 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 08/11] phrasing "call" doesn't go with "as" --- Update/onik_011.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index c0f439b..a1600b3 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -3580,7 +3580,7 @@ void main() //「これらを鬼隠しと呼んでいいかはちょぉっとわかりませんがね＠前原さんの言う通り、確かに毎年１人、行方不明になっています。＠ PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700157", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "「これらを鬼隠しと呼んでいいかはちょぉっとわかりませんがね。", - NULL, "\"I'm not sure if we could call these cases as being demoned away.", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "\"I'm not sure if we could refer these cases as being demoned away.", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700158", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "前原さんの言う通り、確かに毎年１人、行方不明になっています。」", NULL, " It's just as you've said. Every year, one person does go missing.\"", Line_WaitForInput); From abeb444880fe19dc91d299080e28a25ae0593b7c Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 18:42:17 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 09/11] censorship audio change MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=UTF-8 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 8bit they took out the drug reference (I think 覚醒剤 normally refers to amphetamine) --- Update/onik_011.txt | 4 ++-- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index a1600b3..a73fdd4 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -3607,8 +3607,8 @@ void main() OutputLine(NULL, "「えぇ逮捕されてます。", NULL, "\"Yeah, we arrested him.", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700160", 256, 64); - OutputLine(NULL, "覚醒剤の常習歴もあるトンチンカンでしてね。", - NULL, " He was just a miscreant with a record of narcotics abuse.", Line_WaitForInput); + OutputLine(NULL, "以前に、逮捕歴もあるやつでしてね。", + NULL, " He already had a criminal record from before.", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700161", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "別件で取調べ中に犯行を自供してます。", NULL, " He admitted to the crime while being questioned about a different incident.", Line_WaitForInput); From ebbc0899d557c7fd6fcf656cc14597eb296878a4 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 18:44:37 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 10/11] translation fix --- Update/onik_011.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index a73fdd4..9d63849 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -3641,7 +3641,7 @@ void main() //「さぁ…多分単独犯だと思います＠もっとも、今では確かめようもないんですよ＠……実はその男、取り調べ中に、拘置所内でお亡くなりになっちゃいまして。￥ PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700166", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "「さぁ…多分単独犯だと思います。", - NULL, "\"No idea... It's considered a separate case.", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "\"No idea... It was most likely only the one perpetrator.", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700167", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "もっとも、今では確かめようもないんですよ。", NULL, " Moreover, we can't even check now.", Line_WaitForInput); From 296bd8110f8800429b913ee5329b689f7e54815f Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Tue, 1 Dec 2015 19:08:29 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 11/11] wording/translation fix --- Update/onik_011.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_011.txt b/Update/onik_011.txt index 9d63849..2c591c8 100644 --- a/Update/onik_011.txt +++ b/Update/onik_011.txt @@ -4559,7 +4559,7 @@ void main() //　……大石さんとしていた、不穏な、不用意な数々の会話が頭を過ぎる……￥ OutputLine(NULL, "　……大石さんとしていた、不穏な、不用意な数々の会話が頭を過ぎる……。", - NULL, "...All of the ominous things and all the nonsense I spoke to Ooishi-san about began rushing through my head...", Line_Normal); + NULL, "...All of the unsettling and unguarded things I spoke to Ooishi-san about began rushing through my head...", Line_Normal); ClearMessage();