From 858d28c4d15bfb01d1f82f021a2110aa2c717ffe Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Sat, 19 Dec 2015 17:06:50 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 1/7] fixed punctuation --- Update/onik_015.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_015.txt b/Update/onik_015.txt index 07683c2..c80f5a6 100644 --- a/Update/onik_015.txt +++ b/Update/onik_015.txt @@ -2831,7 +2831,7 @@ void main() //　そんな俺の、叫びのような思考は...そのまま口からこぼれた＠ OutputLine(NULL, "　そんな俺の、叫びのような思考は…そのまま口からこぼれた。", - NULL, "Those thoughts, screamed in my head... eventually spilling out of my mouth.", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "Those thoughts screamed in my head... eventually spilling out of my mouth.", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From ec384f60b1ed497dafc95ed12d3e294978d0af00 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Sat, 19 Dec 2015 17:28:55 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 2/7] fixed english written as though 3 boys shared one head... --- Update/onik_015.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_015.txt b/Update/onik_015.txt index c80f5a6..bf6b8be 100644 --- a/Update/onik_015.txt +++ b/Update/onik_015.txt @@ -4310,7 +4310,7 @@ void main() //　額を割られ、血まみれになって倒れる仲間たちを残し、レナは校舎へ向かった＠ OutputLine(NULL, "　額を割られ、血まみれになって倒れる仲間たちを残し、レナは校舎へ向かった。", - NULL, "Leaving her friends covered in blood with gashes on their head, she made her way towards the school building.", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "Leaving her friends covered in blood with gashes on their heads, she made her way towards the school building.", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From 47c8446e95310eb8fe4e33c53c1346cb6a353bf6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Sat, 19 Dec 2015 17:39:36 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 3/7] translation fix how does it even make sense for counselors to just believe everything? --- Update/onik_015.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_015.txt b/Update/onik_015.txt index bf6b8be..8778cbf 100644 --- a/Update/onik_015.txt +++ b/Update/onik_015.txt @@ -4894,7 +4894,7 @@ void main() OutputLine(NULL, "　やさしく、やさしく。", NULL, "Gently, ever so gently.", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLine(NULL, "…カウンセリングの基本は聞きに徹することだ。", - NULL, " The fundamentals of counseling were believing what you were told.", Line_Normal); + NULL, " A fundamental part of counseling is to be a good, patient listener.", Line_Normal); ClearMessage(); From 2242cd4dcfe3ef837a858197c29240912d1a69c4 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Sat, 19 Dec 2015 17:44:42 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 4/7] changed pronoun for Oyashirosama trying to stay neutral with "it" (at the risk of spoilers - I suppose most accurate would be "she", but Rena probably doesn't know either way anyway.. so only "it" makes any real sense) --- Update/onik_015.txt | 4 ++-- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_015.txt b/Update/onik_015.txt index 8778cbf..ac5ccf7 100644 --- a/Update/onik_015.txt +++ b/Update/onik_015.txt @@ -4904,7 +4904,7 @@ void main() NULL, "\"Whoever abandons Hinamizawa... will be hunted down by Oyashiro-sama!!", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/02/120200434", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "　そして…とうとう私のところにも来たんです！！！」", - NULL, " And... they've finally gotten to me!!!\"", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, " And... it's finally gotten to me!!!\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); @@ -4984,7 +4984,7 @@ void main() NULL, "\"Everyone knows... It's Hinamizawa's guardian deity...", Line_WaitForInput); PlaySE(3, "s01/02/120200444", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "それで、雛見沢を捨てて出て行こうとすると……バチを当てるんです。」", - NULL, " And if you ever try abandoning Hinamizawa by leaving... you'll incur his wrath.\"", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, " And if you ever try abandoning Hinamizawa by leaving... you'll incur its wrath.\"", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From 6a2c8904e6945dd125dfbc0639f431bb85acbabb Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Sat, 19 Dec 2015 18:01:25 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 5/7] translation fix --- Update/onik_015.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_015.txt b/Update/onik_015.txt index ac5ccf7..cd451ef 100644 --- a/Update/onik_015.txt +++ b/Update/onik_015.txt @@ -5315,7 +5315,7 @@ void main() //　...オヤシロさまの祟りがどうだったにせよ、クラスメートを金属バットで殴った理由にはなりませんし、被害者が訴えない理由にもなりません＠ PlaySE(3, "s01/11/120700508", 256, 64); OutputLine(NULL, "　…オヤシロさまの祟りがどうだったにせよ、クラスメートを金属バットで殴った理由にはなりませんし、被害者が訴えない理由にもなりません。", - NULL, "...Even if it was Oyashiro-sama's curse, it doesn't add up as to why her classmates, the victims who were beaten with a metal bat, wouldn't press charges.", Line_WaitForInput); + NULL, "...Even if it was Oyashiro-sama's curse, it doesn't explain Rena beating her classmates with a metal bat, or why the victims wouldn't press charges.", Line_WaitForInput); OutputLineAll(NULL, "\n", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); From dd706525f2d771718439a4ec3d594db2f413d275 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Sat, 19 Dec 2015 18:19:24 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 6/7] english fix --- Update/onik_015.txt | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_015.txt b/Update/onik_015.txt index cd451ef..0dcc449 100644 --- a/Update/onik_015.txt +++ b/Update/onik_015.txt @@ -6518,7 +6518,7 @@ void main() //　絶対絶命...という複雑な単語は、もう思いつかなかった........................￥ OutputLine(NULL, "　絶対絶命…という複雑な単語は、もう思いつかなかった……………………。", - NULL, "'Dire straits,' I couldn't even come up the phrase that adequately described my situation...", Line_Normal); + NULL, "'Dire straits,' I couldn't even come up with the phrase that adequately described my situation...", Line_Normal); ClearMessage(); DisableWindow(); DrawScene( "black", 3000 ); From c50732259cbe5d057df97f393031e18f994dc905 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Norgus Date: Sat, 19 Dec 2015 18:29:03 +0000 Subject: [PATCH 7/7] matched message timing to audio --- Update/onik_015.txt | 4 ++-- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/Update/onik_015.txt b/Update/onik_015.txt index 0dcc449..96e88c7 100644 --- a/Update/onik_015.txt +++ b/Update/onik_015.txt @@ -2947,13 +2947,13 @@ void main() NULL, " Talk...", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); SetValidityOfInput( FALSE ); - Wait( 800 ); + Wait( 1400 ); SetValidityOfInput( TRUE ); OutputLine(NULL, "お話。……", NULL, " Talk...", Line_ContinueAfterTyping); //!s200 - + Wait( 2600 ); SetSpeedOfMessage( TRUE, 0, );